Sad Poem I wrote when I was 11

XoxKrissyxox · 08-14-2008 19:16

The Puppet
The girl awoke. She looked at the sky. It gave her a thought.
Todays the day that she'll die. Think of her as a puppet.
Strings on hand to hand. She ran from the forest.
Dance puppet, dance.
Her strings were fading, without them, shed fall apart.
She was going to die, she knew in her heart.
But what was a puppet going to do?
Cry to the shadows?
Pray to the moon?
Her strings nearly gone, she stood for a moment.
Looked at the sky. She laughed about it.
So she spread out her arms, wide and long,
And before you knew it, the puppet was gone.

By Kristin Gram
(this got published into a book )

I have this copyrighted.

Cacti · 08-14-2008 19:21

Wow, I wish something I wrote would get published.
I like writing poetry sometimes, but mostly stories.
Sometimes I'll get really good ideas and then I won't end up writing the actual story because I is lazy butt.

BeautifulCiara · 08-14-2008 19:26

OMG, it's so moving I can't even imagine losing my little one. It's to sad to even think about but you're poem is very beautiful.

MizzLipgloss · 08-14-2008 19:31

I had a poem published when I was 7. It was absolutely rubbish, about Pylons. It was one of those books where they publish poems from all different Primary schools. I dob't know why they published it. Yuk!

Zexion · 08-16-2008 09:38

I did have a poem puplished for a comp, but it was an nonsence poem. You know, humour. smile
I'm hoping to puplish some more serious ones, though...
It was really sad, but beautiful XoxKrissyxox! big_smile

Emilia1403 · 08-16-2008 10:52

your poem is really beautiful

Skyester · 08-16-2008 20:32

exellent

LadyAbeillee · 08-16-2008 23:39

I had a story about carrots published when I was in primary school. My mum just loves to show it off (she knows it word for word) and I cringe everytime.

Katarzena · 08-17-2008 00:40

Wow that's really nice! Love it! How did you publish it? Do you know someone who does that or?

Zexion · 08-19-2008 12:43

LadyAbeillee wrote:
I had a story about carrots published when I was in primary school. My mum just loves to show it off (she knows it word for word) and I cringe everytime.

big_smile
Mine was about a prince called a most embarrasing name...I feel quite sorry for him. lol

TomBoyBobLuvinMe · 08-19-2008 15:03

I've had 2 poems published. Bit deep for an 11 year old.

Adimepiece · 08-19-2008 16:11

Beautiful. You were 11 when you wrote this? If so, you have wonderful talent girl!

Princessasi · 08-19-2008 16:47

wow that is amazing and so meaningful!!
big_smile
i love it

XoxKrissyxox · 08-19-2008 17:40

Katarzena wrote:
Wow that's really nice! Love it! How did you publish it? Do you know someone who does that or?

I entered it in to poetry.com and they published it into a book
I also won an editors choice award for it

Maebelyne · 09-04-2008 01:05

xoxKrissyxox wrote:
Katarzena wrote:
Wow that's really nice! Love it! How did you publish it? Do you know someone who does that or?
I entered it in to poetry.com and they published it into a book
I also won an editors choice award for it

Too bad because poetry.com is a scam (they will publish anyone, but don't take offense because I'm not saying you're just anyone or your poem is bad).

It's a nice poem, though.

I hope you write even better stuff now so you can make sure it's NOT on poetry.com. smile And then maybe you can actually get it published by a real publisher (since poetry.com reserves all the rights to anything you write on that site).

Bar8ie · 09-04-2008 08:32

Very beautiful poem indeed! Hope u write more and share with us smile
i also write poetry, ALOT of it but keep it to myself most of the time but some poems i share them, with this musician in my country, he takes it as an inspiration for his songs. i also had a story of mine published, but now im in process of publishing my paintings for a history book, not my style really but it was a good offer and pay hehe.